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Dao of Discourse - Portrait of a Young Man as The Artist — LiveJournal
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Dao of Discourse
The silence constructed
into a conversation is chimerical,
a fantasy of our inability
to speak our mind. We can talk here
because there are no boundaries
of mind and indiscretion. You speak
and we listen with open and active minds.

Discourse unhurried like two men
talking of the ditch a chinese man made
in golden fervor is the epitome of civilization
We can talk just as well as we type
when our minds, supple as olympic gymnasts,
are freely swaying in unrelenting tranquility.
Adding substance to electronic exchange
blocks us only as far
as we allow our minds to shut down.
Circuity needs electricity
like discourse needs pace - the Mu state.

This is why we cannot speak:
we are not here.


Think I have too many metaphors? How's the pacing on tis one?

People still reading this stuff?

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beloitst From: beloitst Date: August 17th, 2004 10:44 am (UTC) (Link)
We can talk here
because there are no boundaries
of mind and indiscretion.


Still reading - love that line.

Too many metaphors? No such thing. It's not a question of too many metaphors or not enough metaphors, it's a question of distillation...Can you say it in fewer words, fewer images, fewer metaphors, can you distill it down to something cleaner and finer?

Sometimes you can, and you should. Sometimes, you can, but you shouldn't.
abmann From: abmann Date: August 17th, 2004 10:53 am (UTC) (Link)
My god. You sound just like Bei Dao! How many classes did you take with him?
beloitst From: beloitst Date: August 17th, 2004 12:57 pm (UTC) (Link)
None, actually. I absolutely hate writing poetry, and even though I know a class with him would have been worth it, there were so many students who truly wanted to study poetry I never felt I should take up a place.

But I guess I learned something after all, from those years at Beloit :)
moocowrich From: moocowrich Date: August 17th, 2004 09:31 pm (UTC) (Link)
A1) There is no such thing as too many metaphors.

B2) I still read this stuff.
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